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On to today's snippet! Since everyone seemed to enjoy last week's snippet from A Tempest of Passion, I'm continuing more or less from where we left off. Her servant has left her alone with Mr. Dalton and they're holding a bit of a staring contest...
Enjoy!
Elyzabeth
Forgive the run-ons. Changes have been made to adapt to WeWriWa guidelines.
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He was watching her, like a dog deciding what end of the bone to chew on first. Irked, she stared back. William Dalton’s features had no finesse, to be honest, he reminded her of a wild dog. His hair was unruly and too long, the lines of his face were angular and rough. His lips were too wide, his nose too narrow and his left cheek disfigured by an ugly pink scar extending from below his eye to the edge of his mouth. Then there was the matter of his eyes. Dark and unreadable, they had an air about them that spoke of a man with little joy in his life. Emily shuddered. It mattered little to her that this was the man that had “saved” her last night. It was time for him to leave.
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A Tempest of Passion
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I like that she doesn't back down from him.
ReplyDeleteHe must have some redeeming virtues LOL! Very descriptive snippet - I could really visualize him.
ReplyDeleteWell done! Great use of description that wasn't "telling". He was completely shown. Very edgy, too.
ReplyDeleteThe way he's described from her POV makes it abundantly clear why she wants to be rid of him.
ReplyDeleteGreat description. I'm with Veronica. I mean...he saved her, right? I wonder if her description of him will change somewhere in the future?
ReplyDeleteGreat description! I hope she finds something redeemable about him, god she sounded harsh. But you know what, I liked her harshness.
ReplyDeleteHow do you get a guy to leave when he isn't ready? She's got a problem. Good description of him.
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