Quarantine has finally gotten to me an I've dyed my hair. Hahaha. It was supposed to be a reddish brown but it's turned out a darker shade than I would have liked. Hopefully it'll fade soon.
If you still haven't joined my Facebook group, make sure you stop by. I'm holding a special Mother's Day Giveaway there.
Last but obviously not least, on to today's snippet. I've jumped a few lines but we're still in the same scene as last week. Made some changes to keep to the Weekend Writing Warriors guidelines.
Enjoy!
Elyzabeth
Forgive the run-ons. Changes have been made to adapt to WeWriWa guidelines.
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“Mr. Dalton, I am indebted to you for I do not know what came over me last night, but I have been told that my well-being is your responsibility. I am most grateful for your assistance.”
William smiled broadly, the motion pulling the mark beneath his eye. Emily’s breath caught and she curled her hands into tight balls at her side, aghast against the unexpected urge to touch that blemished flesh.
“It was but my duty to rescue you from the cold, heartless floor, Ms. Bunsbury,” William said with a jovial grin. Clasping his hands behind his back, he waited for her to say something.
Emily only clamped her jaws together, desperately searching for words. Speechless. Only one other time in her life had she been unable to speak under a man’s gaze, and back then she had been but a naïve girl of ten and eight years. Now, she was twenty and eight years, a wiser woman who knew what a perusal like the one Mr. Dalton gave her meant. He was like all others: thoughtless to a woman’s desires and mind, only curious to what lay beneath skirts and petticoats.
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Fascinating snippet. I pictured the scene so well.
ReplyDeleteThanks Charmaine <3
DeleteGood characterization. Love the premise. Just downloaded to my Kindle. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Teresa! I hope you enjoy it! <3
DeleteElyzabeth, we just relaxed the rules on wewriwa. I wrote about it on my 8sunday post this week. You won't have to change punctuation or write run on sentences anymore. :-)
ReplyDeleteyay!
DeleteShe's got a jaded view of men, but that doesn't make her wrong. Is he the one to change her mind? I hope!
ReplyDeleteShe has her reasons, and he won't have it easy ;-)
DeleteI love how vivid this scene is!
ReplyDeletethanks! :D
DeleteLots of emotion in the snippet, made me tense to read it but inagoodway, due to your skill at painting the picture.
ReplyDeleteThanks Veronica! <3
DeleteI'll bet he's more interested than most in the underside of her petticoats -- but also more interested than most in her mind and personality, as well.
ReplyDeleteI think he seems a little more courteous than she gives him credit for.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely, but she's been terribly hurt in the past and doesn't trust easily.
DeleteThis looks like a REALLY fun read! ~ Karysa Faire
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DeleteI love the language, reminiscence of a bygone era. He's courteous and interested in her in a way she hasn't truly seen before--though she thinks she has. I hope she gives him a chance.
ReplyDeleteHe'll have to work for it ;-)
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