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Otherwise, here we are again with another few sentences from my WIP. I'm afraid things are progressing slowly, but better slow and steady than nothing at all and I do have an overall idea of where I want the novel to go, so that's good. *smile* Anyhow, about today´s sentences: Last week, Jace encountered two men dressed in suits and wearing sunglasses. A fight ensues, but I've skipped it as it's not very well written. Today's sentences are what follows. Be ready to discover what those men were...
This is totally unedited, still untitled and still in its baby stages. As always, thank you for taking the time to stop by, share and leave a comment. It makes my day to read your feedback!
XOXO
Elyzabeth
By the way, just out of curiosity, I need to get a new laptop. Does anyone have any suggestions?
*creative editing to keep to the guidelines has most definitely taken place*
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Jace´s eyes
widened as he opened the door. They were everywhere. Humans and vamps mingled in the street, chatting, laughing, acting normal. Transfixed, he didn't bother to brush away the sweat gathering on his brow. Though the blood
sucking demons had existed for as long as he could remember, they had never been so out in the open and there were never, ever, so many of them
together.
Loud voices caught his attention and he noticed a group of young vamps that reminded him of the kids from Lost Boys coming his way. Slowly, so as not draw attention to himself, Jace went back inside and shut the door. His gaze landed on the
elderly couple, still hiding behind the counter.
“What’s
going on here?” he hissed.
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This sounds like a very interesting place to be. Nice Snippet it makes me want to read more.
ReplyDeleteThanks Daisy! :-)
DeleteGoodness me, what is going on?!? Great Snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks Doris!
DeleteNice reference to the Lost Boys, but I hate to admit that I never saw the movie. I wonder what that elderly couple are up to. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteIt's never too late to watch it, Frank ;-) Thanks for reading!
DeleteMystery and when he hissed, I had to wonder what species he comes from. If he's a regular guy, leave out the hiss. Suspense everywhere in this fascinating eight.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the advice, Charmaine. Jace is not entirely human but I don't think his species hisses. Will change it. :-)
DeleteLooking forward to the old couple's response. You've gotten me curious as to what's up! As for laptops...we recently got an Acer touchscreen, and I love it!!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Millie! And thanks for the laptop info. I've seen the Acer touchscreen here and it does look nice and functional!
DeleteOh good question and I want the answer too! Excellent excerpt, loved your character's confusion...
ReplyDeleteThanks Veronica! :D
DeleteI wonder why the elderly couple is hiding. Do they know something Jace doesn't? I like the way you showed Jace's unease.
ReplyDeleteHehe, yes, yes they do. Thanks Sandra!
DeleteI can smell trouble brewing in this intriguing snippet.
ReplyDeleteAbout the laptop. I use a small Sony Vaio notebook. I've had it for 4 years now and it still does the job.
Thanks Kiru! Will look into the Sony Vaio, I've had mixed reviews on them- from people that love them to those that hate them.
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