Thank you for all the good luck wishes for me and my doggy. We did quite well and especially, we had a lot of fun. *smile*
I've been a bit down because I got a revise and resubmit for a novel (the first book in a series) I had sent in. The list of things the publisher didn't like is so long I don't even know where to start and to make things worse, I had already started working on the next book in the series. *sigh*
In any case, on to today's snippet! Last week Kaila killed a minion. I've skipped through the gory details to today's sentences. Please let me know what you think!
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She
couldn’t be entirely sure, but Bony Arms here seemed to be the last of them.
However, in the antechamber to a Sin’s door one could never be certain. Knives
in hand, she cautiously continued down the dimly lit hall. A gentle draft
cooled her skin and she shivered. There were no doors at either side of the
long passage, nor any visible nooks for guards and other unsavory demons to
hide. She frowned. Was this what Sin’s considered protection? Granted, they
were strong and powerful and dangerous, but seriously, a few demons and some
eerily lit halls wouldn’t detain even the most cowardly human.
She picked up her pace but continued listening for any out of place
sounds. There was nothing to be heard except for the occasional crackle of a
flame on a scone.
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Great snippet! I particularly like the detail you added about the sound of the flame in the last sentence. Good luck with your revisions.
ReplyDeleteI have a feeling she just hasn't run into the real security yet. Can't wait to see what she finds!
ReplyDeleteYou are a fine writer. Don't forget it. And the snippet bears foreboding with every step she takes.
ReplyDeleteExcellent build up of tension, Elyzabeth. Loved your snippet.
ReplyDeleteDon't forget to be true to yourself. Charmaine has it when she says you are a fine writer.
I'm with the heroine - this all seems too easy, so the tension really ratchets up! Well done snippet indeed. I guess on the R&R the question is whether you're ok with making all the changes they asked for. Sometimes the answer is no! Best wishes either way.
ReplyDeleteSomething's bound to happen - it all seems too easy. Good tension.
ReplyDeleteSorry about the R&R. Always tough to get these, but I'm sure you will bounce back with a better version. Good luck with it.
"...seriously, a few demons and some eerily lit halls wouldn’t detain even the most cowardly human." All I can say is that she has a wildly unrealistic opinion of human courage!
ReplyDeleteSuch an intriguing snippet, Elyzabeth, and hugs again on the R&R. xxx
ReplyDeleteJust when you know it was too good to be true...yikes, I feel trouble coming! Good snippet. As to the please resubmit, congrats on the editor liking your work and wanting to see it again as "Requested" inbox material. Always better than a rejection and means she did a very careful and thorough read. Still doesn't mean you have to agree with her singular opinion unless you feel going with her background imprint would further your writing career in substantial ways. Choices. Hugs.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of a sin being an actual creature - my imagination runs wild! Good luck with the R&R if you choose to do it. Some books just aren't meant for some editors (or publishing houses).
ReplyDeleteShe's right to be cautious. If it seems too easy, it is. Great tension and suspense in this snippet!
ReplyDeleteGotta love a smart protagonist, and you'll get through your writing journey! :D
ReplyDeleteI could feel the suspense thick in this snippet.
ReplyDeleteMore hugs, Elyzabeth. xx
Wow, the tension here is high.it
ReplyDeletes too empty, I think Bony Arms is only a precursor