Saturday, July 19, 2014

#8Sunday #SexySnippets #WeekendWritingWarriors: Bear Heart #TheWitchesMischief4

Happy Sunday, lovelies!
As I promised last week, this Sunday I'm going to start sharing snippets from Book 4 of The Witches' Mischief Series, Bear Heart. Below are the first lines of the novel...

Thanks for reading!
XOXO,
Elyzabeth    
*creative editing to keep to the guidelines has probably taken place*
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He wandered through the woods. Head bowed down, nose close to the floor, scavenging for food. Then, he heard it. He froze. His heart skipped a beat then tightened into his chest before resuming its beat at a speed that left him dizzy. Ears perked, he started ambling through the forest in its direction. He stopped. There it was again. Laughter. Loud, boisterous, so unladylike it warmed him from head to toe. He’d recognize that laughter anywhere, even if it had been more than a hundred years since he’d heard it.
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Bear Heart 
(A Naughty Fairy Tale)
The Witches' Mischief Series 4

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By day a bear, by night a man.

Half a century ago Simon Lancaster loved a woman. But when he committed a crime and was seduced by a witch his fate was sealed. Forced to live as a shifter by day and human by night, he becomes hopeless.

He believes there is nothing left in life for him. That is, until he meets Margaret O'Hare. An unconventional woman, Margaret makes him feel whole again, but he doesn't know if he can allow the walls he has erected around his heart to lower, no matter how much he grows to care for her.

As their time together has them becoming closer, he starts to trust and love again. But a happily ever after might not be in Simon's future as dark shadows emerge to destroy what he has built with Margaret.

 

23 comments:

  1. Great start to your book. I love the attention to detail which shows his alert nature and animalistic tendencies.

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  2. Great start and pace that left me wondering what's next. Nicely done!

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  3. An intriguing snippet and you paint such a wonderful image of him and his reaction. I'm looking forward to more.

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  4. Nice! I just love that he's a bear/man, Elyzabeth. I don't think this has been done much. :-)

    I saw a couple of things that I'll mention. Just food for thought--unless it's already pubbed, then please ignore. "... nose close to the floor, scavenging for food. Then, he heard it. He froze. His heart skipped a beat the..." I'd put "forest" in front of the word floor. Just "floor" gave me a fleeting, odd image. And I'd write, "His heart skipped, then..." Skipped a beat is sort of cliche, and if you leave out "a beat", the second beat doesn't make the reader stumble.

    All in all, good 8. Atmospheric and visual!

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    1. Thanks a lot, Teresa! The story hasn't been published yet, so I'll be taking your advice.

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    2. Ooh, glad Teresa clued you in on those little nagging things, now I don't need to say a durn thing : ) Love the idea of the bear/man! So cool. I think maybe the second "laughter" should just be laugh...maybe...what do you think?

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  5. Powerful start, Elyzabeth! I love that he recognized the laughter. By night a man. Love it. :)

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  6. So glad to hear memory hasn't left him entirely. This is very promising, Elyzabeth. Great snippet.

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    1. Oh no, he conserves all his memories, sadly for him. Thanks Siobhan! :D

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  7. Oooh, I'm loving the sound of this! :-D

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  8. I'm thoroughly intrigued! Excellent excerpt and I can't wait to read more...much more!

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  9. Great snippet, want to know what's next :-)

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