Happy Sunday, lovelies!
Today I’m continuing with the story I started last week (you
can read that here). Thank you for all your comments and encouragement. I did not include the sound she heard to keep to editing guidelines, but I'll make sure to keep it when I get to the final draft *smile*
When I wrote today’s snippet I knew for certain who the
creature was, but now, things might have changed. Ah, these
characters with a mind of their own!
I'd love your thoughts.
XOXO,
Elyzabeth
XOXO,
Elyzabeth
*creative editing to
keep to the guidelines has taken place*
#SexySnippets
and #8Sunday Sentences
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Clare lost track of time and her surroundings as she inevitably
followed the sound she wanted to ignore. It was a call she’d been trying to forget for
years, one that had caused her nothing but grief. A call she could not deny as
much as she could not hide the moon shaped mark on her shoulder.
Abruptly, everything became quiet and she froze. The hairs on the back of her neck stood and her
knees started to shake. Someone was watching her. She wrapped her arms around
herself, wanting to run but unable to do so as a creature emerged from behind the thick trunk of an oak.
So well written, you kept the suspense going 'til the end and then the readers screams, "I want to know more."
ReplyDeleteThanks Charmaine! :)
DeleteYou kept me at the edge of my seat with this snippet, Elyzabeth. Don't we just love when characters have a mind of their own. LOL
ReplyDeleteThanks Kiru! Yeah, we gotta love them or else... LOL
DeleteYikes! The hairs on the back of my neck are sticking up too!
ReplyDelete:D Mission accomplished! :p
DeleteAnd now of course we want to know about the creature! I'm on the edge of my chair, along with the others...excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteOohh, who is the creature? Such a tense and exciting snippet :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Doris! :D
DeleteWow! Such a tense snippet. I can't wait to learn more about the creature. And if you don't mind, can I make one little suggestion. The word inevitably in the first sentence feels awkward to me. Just my two cents.
ReplyDeleteThanks Jess! And thanks for the suggestion! It´s more than welcome :)
DeleteLoved this snippet. Its a real tease to read on, nicely done. I wonder what she discovers? Apologies I couldn't comment yesterday.
ReplyDeleteThanks Daisy! And don´t worry about the "late" comment, sometimes I take days to get to snippets too.
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